Okay the big emotional snafu was for naught, I had a moment of name mistake and thought this critique was from someone I had met earlier and looked up to as a published author. Silly me. But I realized that I do live literally next door to a high school so I am going to see if an English teacher will help my “issues” in grammar and punct. I will get it figured out.
Any ways on to my topic. She brought up something that did make me think. She said I needed to give her more reason to like the characters. I didn’t panic about this but thought deeply…
Do I know Noble too well to write him effectively?
Think about it he has been in my head for almost 20 years in one form or another. I will blog about his evolution from David to Noble sometime.
The question still stands.
Do I know nobles favorite breakfast cereal? Yes Frosted flakes.
Favorite color? Green.
Favorite band? at the moment it is Fall Out Boy.
Favorite attire? Jeans black pointy toe cowboy boots and old rock band t shirts. But he wears white shirts and plaid over shirts for Lyris.
Favorite car? His prowler still but he likes his yellow 1932 Ford roadster too.
Case in point… I know too much about Noble to write him effectively for readers. I assume that you know him as well as I do. With my other main characters I write more internal dialogue and description and other things to give the reader an idea of who they are dealing with.
Not that I mind having him in my head. In fact… I love it. But for my reader, I wish I knew less.
Oh and By The Way... His favorite pajamas? Pink flannel with red hearts a gift from his best friend…