The very serious (and funny) case for readers.

As I am finishing up my MS for submission I have sent it out to many readers. I have had many serious line and content editors. With each edit I have made the changes that people suggest and then wait for another one to come back.

Well,I am working on that last edit and had to laugh. This Is what I wrote:

Antony’s black hair slapped against the back of his neck as he ran. It still smelled of chlorine, he never showered in between his legs of exercise. He had only paused a moment as he pulled his pants and shoes on then took off from the community Olympic sized pool into the cool air. Before his laps at the pool, he rode his bike for 10 miles.

Okay, after many edits I missed something serious. Look again. :)

Antony’s black hair slapped against the back of his neck as he ran. It still smelled of chlorine, he never showered in between his legs of exercise. He had only paused a moment as he pulled his pants and shoes on then took off from the community Olympic sized pool into the cool air. Before his laps at the pool, he rode his bike for 10 miles.

It's a good thing that someone saw it. I'm glad that THAT didnt go to the editors. Who knew?

Readers are your best friend in thie business, and I am thankful for all of them.

Yes Virginia, I am insane. . .

Okay those of you who know me know that Dominion Day the first book in my Dominion Day series is polished and submitted. After getting a personalized rejection I realized that the plot arc in DD1 isn't as solid as I thought it is. I talked with my friend and with her helping me I decided that I should take the story back a few years. To show the reader why he is nervous around women, why, when he goes from assassin to Prophet it is such a dramatic change and why the change happened in the first place, why when he leaves the corps he comes back to it. All of these unanswered questions created by DD1 were never answered, just that is the way the story flowed.

As I was writing the rough draft of # 6 & 7 I had an urge to write #0 which it is right now, cause I am too busy to change all of the numbers. :) So
I guess I am just following my promptings from earlier.

This has been a long and agonizing decision, I have been literaly been sick to my stomach thinking that a book that I have considered finished is going to have to be rewritten. But the plot rings true to me and I feel right in my gut. I am also convinced because the writing coming out of my head is the most complete and gramaticaly correct ever for a rough draft. I love the way this is heading. I know I am doing the right thing, and it feels good.