tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1179369273914823636.post2145730038753715599..comments2023-12-21T05:31:47.533-08:00Comments on My Life in a Laptop: Nows you're chance to vote!!!!!C. Michelle Jefferieshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11959637456903210462noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1179369273914823636.post-64255651496885644322007-12-19T11:23:00.000-08:002007-12-19T11:23:00.000-08:00I like #1a and #4 the best. I get it now when rea...I like #1a and #4 the best. I get it now when reading them that Noble is destined to become the next prophet. Great job!Marilynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12831261193099004802noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1179369273914823636.post-67726215342535099952007-12-18T11:38:00.000-08:002007-12-18T11:38:00.000-08:00Is #3 the one that starts with "As one mans desire...Is #3 the one that starts with "As one mans desire..?" Because that one is also my choice. However, I still like the first one somewhat. I think you should combine the too. Let me think about it more... <BR/> But, in the paragraph where Antony goes from corps assassin to teacher, I think you should tell what kind of teacher. School teacher? Yoga instructor? Need more detail on that. I also think that if I hadn't read the story, I wouldn't get it that Noble is going to take Katsu's place as Prophet. That needs to be explained better. How would you do that? I dunno, because I never write! ha ha ha. I hope my comments aren't killing you. You know a lot more than I do. Anyway, it's fun to read!Marilynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12831261193099004802noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1179369273914823636.post-42971973036370178382007-12-17T10:32:00.000-08:002007-12-17T10:32:00.000-08:00Number three for me!One note, I wouldn't captitali...Number three for me!<BR/><BR/>One note, I wouldn't captitalize destiny, that makes it sound like a character in the book, since its often used as a woman's name.<BR/><BR/>Break a legAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com